JEREMY: Hello, Helen. Sorry I'm late.

杰瑞米：你好，海伦。抱歉我来晚了。

HELEN: Hi, Jeremy, no problem.

海伦：嗨，杰里米，没事的。

Well we'd better work out where we are on our project, I suppose.

我们最好确定一下这个课题我们进行到哪了。

JEREMY: Yeah. I've looked at the drawings you've done for my story, 'The Forest', and I think they're brilliant - they really create the atmosphere I had in mind when I was writing it.

杰瑞米：是的。我已经看过你给我的故事画的画了，叫“森林”对吧，真的很赞！它们营造出了我写作时构想的那种氛围。

HELEN: I'm glad you like them.

海伦：我很高兴你喜欢。

JEREMY: There are just a few suggestions I'd like to make.

杰瑞米：我只是有一些小建议。

HELEN: Go ahead.

海伦：说吧。

JEREMY: Now, I'm not sure about the drawing of the cave - it's got trees all around it, which is great, but the drawing's a bit too static, isn' it?

杰瑞米：我觉得洞穴的手绘，虽然周边绿树环绕很不错，但是你不觉得有点太静了吗？

I think it needs some action.

我觉得应该有点动态元素在里面。

HELEN: Yes, there's nothing happening.

海伦：是的，确实有点沉闷。

Perhaps I should add the boy - Malcolm, isn't it?

或许我应该把马尔科姆那个小男孩加进去，怎么样？

He would be walking up to it.

可以将他画成正在走向那里。

JEREMY: Yes, let's have Malcolm in the drawing.

杰瑞米：是的，我们把马尔科姆加进画里吧。

And what about putting in a tiger - the one that he makes friends with a bit later?

再加一只老虎吧，就是后来和他成为朋友的那只。

Maybe it could be sitting under a tree washing itself.

或许可以把它画成坐在树下清洗自己的样子。

HELEN: And the tiger stops in the middle of what it's doing when it sees Malcolm walking past.

海伦：然后当它看到马尔科姆路过时，它停了下来。

JEREMY: That's a good idea.

杰瑞米：不错。

HELEN: OK, I'll have a go at that.

海伦：好，就这么定了。

JEREMY: Then there's the drawing of the crowd of men and women dancing.

杰瑞米：还有一幅是关于一群男男女女共舞的画面。

They're just outside the forest, and there's a lot going on.

他们就在森林外，然后有很多元素在里面。

HELEN: That's right, you wanted them to be watching a carnival procession, but I thought it would be too crowded.

海伦：对，你原本想让他们观看一场游行，但是我觉得那样太拥挤了。

Do you think it works like this?

你觉得这样行吗？

JEREMY: Yes, I like what you've done.

杰瑞米：嗯，我喜欢你画的。

The only thing is, could you add Malcolm to it, without changing what's already there.

只是能不能在不改变其他元素的基础上，把马尔科姆加进去？

HELEN: What about having him sitting on the tree trunk on the right of the picture?

海伦：那让他坐在画面右方的树枝上怎么样？

JEREMY: Yes, that would be fine.

杰瑞米：好，应该不错。

HELEN: And do you want him watching the other people?

海伦：你想让他看着其他人吗？

JEREMY: No, he's been left out of all the fun, so I'd like him to be crying - that'll contrast nicely with the next picture, where he's laughing at the clowns in the carnival.

杰瑞米：不，我觉得他应该没有兴趣了，他应该哭得很伤心。这样才能和我下一幅，他边看着马戏团小丑边大笑出来的画面作强烈对比。

HELEN: Right, I'll do that.

海伦：好，我知道了。

JEREMY: And then the drawing of the people ice skating in the forest.

杰瑞米：还有一幅是关于人们在森林滑冰的画面。

HELEN: I wasn't too happy with that one.

海伦：我不太满意那张。

Because they've supposed to be skating on grass, aren't they?

因为他们应该是在草地上滑，对吧？

JEREMY: That's right, and it's frozen over.

杰瑞米：是的，草地已经冻冰了。

At the moment it doesn't look quite right.

现在它看起来不太合适。

HELEN: Mm, I see what you mean.

海伦：嗯，我知道了。

I'll have another go at that.

我会换种方式。

JEREMY: And I like the wool hats they're wearing.

杰瑞米：我喜欢他们戴的毡帽。

Maybe you could give each of them a scarf, as well.

或许你应该再给每人画条围巾。

HELEN: Yeah, that's easy enough.

海伦：嗯，小菜一碟。

They can be streaming out behind the people to suggest they're skating really fast.

可以将他们画成从人们背后窜出来的样子，让人感觉他们滑得很快。

JEREMY: Mm, great. Well that's all on the drawings.

杰瑞米：嗯，对。把这些都画进去吧。

HELEN: Right. So you've finished writing your story and I just need to finish illustrating it, and my story and your drawings are done.

海伦：好的。你已经完成你的写作了，我还需要把我的图解做完。然后我的故事和你的手绘就都完成了。